Arelith

Possibly a bit embarrassing, but over the years I've written a lot of short stories, and never done anything with them, other than leaving them to die on discarded hard drives.

So I decided I'd start a blog, and have them put online.

https://medium.com/@danielmorris_69831/ ... 34410d348a

I'll probably add one every couple of weeks until I get too self-conscious and delete the whole thing again.

Well done - kept me interested through the end and thought provoking as well. I really appreciate art that is open to personal interpretation, whatever form that may be.

Now go submit it to Amazing Stories -

I already told Irongron what I loved about it, but if you like hopelessness, BEAUTIFUL LANGUAGE, and an awesome premise. I HIGHLY recommend reading this!

This brought me back to my University 4000 level creative writing classes, definitely a treat to read.

Yeah you shouldn't be modest. Nice short story. I thought first it was going to be a punch at the meat industry, it was interesting to see where the story ended up.

Nice! I'm a sucker for scifi with a sympathetic voice. I also like very prosaic and plain description that doesn't overly puzzle the reader, and the story left me puzzled in places, but I think it provided a nice build-up to the vernacular dialogue and made sense structurally. I'd still recommend using complexity very sparingly, but so much in reading is up to taste. The writing felt rather personal, so you ought to be very embarrassed, but that was also what I liked most about it. Kudos for being brave and sharing! It's good writing. If you feel like being a stickler, I can point out some typos I caught (e.g. its v. it's), but that's totally unnecessary as they don't affect how the story reads at all. Sorry for bringing that up, actually, but I'd want my stories proofread so this is me looking out.

I hope Eddie didn't burn up yet and we get to read more of him.

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Sun Jul 05, 2020 7:11 pm

Nice! I'm a sucker for scifi with a sympathetic voice. I also like very prosaic and plain description that doesn't overly puzzle the reader, and the story left me puzzled in places, but I think it provided a nice build-up to the vernacular dialogue and made sense structurally. I'd still recommend using complexity very sparingly, but so much in reading is up to taste. The writing felt rather personal, so you ought to be very embarrassed, but that was also what I liked most about it. Kudos for being brave and sharing! It's good writing. If you feel like being a stickler, I can point out some typos I caught (e.g. its v. it's), but that's totally unnecessary as they don't affect how the story reads at all. Sorry for bringing that up, actually, but I'd want my stories proofread so this is me looking out.

I hope Eddie didn't burn up yet and we get to read more of him.

Thanks for the feedback, and yes, I noticed some errors too, and no, it wasn't at all personal! I think one of the greatest pieces of praise I had when studying was after writing a story about divorce - in conversation with one of my professors (himself a novelist), he started talking sympathetically to me about how hard it must have been getting married and divorced at such a young age...I had to then explain that no, I had never actually been married (or divorced), and writing about the just based upon my impression of what a divorce court was probably like.

I think it was the highest mark I've ever received.

The embarrassment that comes with sharing stories really comes from just putting them out there, it's very different from writing for Arelith. The next one I'll add couldn't be more different, an illustrated chidren's story - but not for another couple of weeks! (I'm far too busy with Arelith)

Total change of pace there, I've added an illustrated children's story. It's not the best quality on that site, so apologies if it is hard to read.

https://medium.com/@danielmorris_69831/ ... b1db4dc1d5

i love this story but it's so cutesy-sad it makes me mad!